I felt I'd taken the right kind,
And dealt with what was left behind.
Right or left, I deftly write.
And dealt with what was left behind.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I took what seemed the right way,
But a no-way was what I was left with.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I'd trodden in the rightest of the way,
But was saddened as I was left at bay.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I thought I was in the right state,
But I was left with a bad fate.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I supposed that it was my right to claim the best,
But I was left with none by the rest.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I enjoyed my wealth right away,
And left away enjoying my wisdom.
Now left with the right,
I deftly leave with reality by my side!
- This is my first attempt of penning down a poem. As a person who's written it, I carry the responsibility as to explain my work. It is all about a person who comes to know what reality has at stake for him, even when he has optimism. It carries forward a feeling of remorse by the person who feels that his optimistic approach was erring at the end of the day. REALITY AND OPTIMISM NEVER GO HAND IN HAND. Let me remind you that this is my first attempt and I would like to hear suggestion regarding my work as I'm novice to this. Do remember, no commments at the end of a work leaves the author as a dull one! Have a nice day!
But a no-way was what I was left with.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I'd trodden in the rightest of the way,
But was saddened as I was left at bay.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I thought I was in the right state,
But I was left with a bad fate.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I supposed that it was my right to claim the best,
But I was left with none by the rest.
Right or left, I deftly write.
I enjoyed my wealth right away,
And left away enjoying my wisdom.
Now left with the right,
I deftly leave with reality by my side!
- This is my first attempt of penning down a poem. As a person who's written it, I carry the responsibility as to explain my work. It is all about a person who comes to know what reality has at stake for him, even when he has optimism. It carries forward a feeling of remorse by the person who feels that his optimistic approach was erring at the end of the day. REALITY AND OPTIMISM NEVER GO HAND IN HAND. Let me remind you that this is my first attempt and I would like to hear suggestion regarding my work as I'm novice to this. Do remember, no commments at the end of a work leaves the author as a dull one! Have a nice day!
9 shouts!:
Good attempt! Yet I feel that you are only writing about the difficulties you had by choosing right over wrong.
Last line is a good kick off :)
Pretty good for a first attempt.
this was good one :)
bit raw but the feelings were genuine !
good one gopsay. keep writing, time you started writing fiction - short stories
That was an awesome piece of thing from a tenth grader. The way you maintained the rhyme, the track(in the poem too) & the theme of the poem was awesome. It looks as if you had practised poems unknown to this world. Anyways, it was a very good effort. All I wish to say is you've found a lane to walk on & plz go miles before you sleep. All the best!
Urs,
Naveen Anand.S
It s great. Expecting many more of this sort from u.
Written with right or left its definately a good attempt.
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It is a good poem, im following ur blog and u r doing a great work, chk out my scribbles (im saying it as poem ;) ). Do post ur comments..(http://iyen-corn-thoughts.blogspot.com/2009/02/feeling-alone-and-standing-alone.html)
very good for a first poem!!!
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